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May. 7th, 2011 | 12:43 am

The God Eaters



Contents:
Prologue
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Chapter 7
Chapter 8
Chapter 9
Chapter 10
Chapter 11
Chapter 12
Chapter 13
Chapter 14
Chapter 15
Chapter 16
Chapter 17
Chapter 18
Chapter 19
Chapter 20
Chapter 21
Chapter 22
Chapter 23
Chapter 24
Chapter 25
Chapter 26
Chapter 27
Chapter 28
Chapter 29
Chapter 30
Chapter 31
Epilogue

If you enjoy this story, you may be pleased to hear that I'm a self-publishin' fool, and you can get 'The God Eaters' in dead-tree trade-paperback format from Lulu, Powell's, Barnes & Noble, or Amazon, or ask your local bookseller to order it for you; the ISBN is 1847288650.

A note about criticism --
In general I'm very grateful for criticism. And you can certainly still give it for this story. But since I've put it out there on paper, I kind of don't want to change the pixel version. I'm not sure why. Because it feels untidy if they don't match? Also, this is pretty old -- I think I finished it in '04? -- and if I try to fix the novicey feel of the awkward bits, I'd end up rewriting the whole thing instead of updating my current projects. But like I said, you can still leave criticism if you like, and it may well help me improve the things I'm writing now.

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Comments {28}

kiki_diesunddas

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from: kiki_diesunddas
date: Jun. 3rd, 2011 07:36 pm (UTC)
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i feel rather stupid doing this, but everyone and their grandmothers rec me this story. but i'm a triggery person and i like to know what awaits me. if i can take it and if it's worth it in the end. of course only i would know that. but so far i loved everything i've read here. so, what mental images await me? and, without spoiling too much, would you say the ending is rather happy, indifferent or sad?

normally, i wouldn't do this, but you said i could :)
(actually i feel stupid because this story is rec'ed so often, i should know what awaits me... shutting up now)

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 4th, 2011 04:07 am (UTC)
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Well, I'm probably going to spoiler stuff because you didn't ask about a specific trigger, but okay:

Children engaging in bloody violence toward each other (onscreen).
Child abuse by adults (offscreen).
Child prostitution (offscreen).
Rape (offscreen).
Mindrape (onscreen).

As for the ending, I would say: it's not a candycoated okayfest, but it is positive.

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kiki_diesunddas

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from: kiki_diesunddas
date: Jun. 6th, 2011 10:26 am (UTC)
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okay reading it, loving it so far. bought it as paperbayk in case you're interested.
prison-set stories always make me feel kinda queasy and the fact that it's so very well written doesn't help that feeling, but all in all, i'm completely drawn in. and it's your fault i didn't get sleep last night. so, thank you!
off to reading on.

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 6th, 2011 03:51 pm (UTC)
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Ah, hmm, I suppose prison may count as another type of mental bad touch, huh? Well, anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying it, and thank you for buying a copy!

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kiki_diesunddas

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from: kiki_diesunddas
date: Jun. 7th, 2011 04:59 pm (UTC)
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just so you know, i'm propably going to spam you with comments while i read through it.
i read while i was in my literature course, came to the sex scene and burst out laughing - not that it was funny, was just weird to read such things in public - they all looked at me like i was crazy and i almost told them "almost 200 pages in and finally there's fucking" but i doubt they would have appreciated as much as i did.
reckon it's appropriate to write my term paper about "God Eaters"?
as you see, still loving it.

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 13th, 2011 03:25 am (UTC)
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Ahaha, that'd be an entertaining term paper. :D

Since I wasn't comment answery guy it's probably late to say this, but please do spam comments at will, I like to read them even if I don't always reply.

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kiki_diesunddas

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from: kiki_diesunddas
date: Jun. 13th, 2011 12:54 pm (UTC)
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so, i finished it. and the only thing missing was the epic music playing in the background of the last fighting scenes. kinda lord of the rings-esque.
but, in risk of being repetitive, i loved it. read the last 3 days non-stop.
but, what will i read now? since i love reading books more than things on the computer i wondered if you'll ever self-publish your other works? the kastor-chronicals come to mind :D
anyway, off to seeking more stories.

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 14th, 2011 03:00 am (UTC)
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I'm glad you liked it! Yes, I do intend to get most of my stuff into dead-tree format one way or another eventually. It's just kind of hard to say when, for various reasons.

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Andy Murray

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from: sassinak_wf
date: Feb. 23rd, 2012 04:06 pm (UTC)
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I always hear Ecstacy of Gold from The Good, The Bad, and the Ugly play in my head during certain parts of The God Eaters.

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arran3399

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from: arran3399
date: Jun. 14th, 2011 01:24 pm (UTC)
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hi, i want to ask what method ash used to encrypt his observation notes and diary in your story: the god eaters?
Furthermore, was there any differences between the god eaters online version and
hardcopy version? Thx :D

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 18th, 2011 05:26 am (UTC)
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Did you ask this same question over on RHQ? Cuz I swear I just answered it somewhere, but I dn't see my reply here. *scratches head*

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 23rd, 2011 04:43 am (UTC)
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Yaknowhat? You and a few other people asked if there were differences, and I said no, and I was wrong! I had somehow uploaded an old version that was a whole chapter shorter. Sorry!

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Matthew Keevil

Sequel?

from: Matthew Keevil
date: Jun. 17th, 2011 11:27 pm (UTC)
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What is the possibility of a sequel to this story at some point in the future? The ending seems made for it, and I for one would do a little dance and probably be happy as larry for about a week just to hear of such a thing. The world, the concept of the theovores and the way they are portrayed in particular, is just plain fascinating, I'd love to write an RPG based on it, but mostly I just want to explore this fascinating place you've created and the characters that inhabit it.

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Jesse Hajicek

Re: Sequel?

from: gomichan
date: Jun. 18th, 2011 05:28 am (UTC)
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I've been toying with that idea for a while now. I'll probably put a more serious effort into it once I've polished off a few of my WIP's. I want to play more with it too, it's just that my head's full right now. :D

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Alex

Re: Sequel?

from: kaberett
date: Jun. 19th, 2011 03:53 pm (UTC)
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*flail!*

I'd be absolutely delighted to read anything of the kind, if it ever makes it to the top of your list.

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Alex

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from: kaberett
date: Jun. 19th, 2011 03:56 pm (UTC)
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Every time I read this I find new patterns you've put into it. I'm coming back to it about once a year at the moment, and it delights me and soothes me every time, and - thank you.



You say you don't have much immediate use for concrit on this, but would it be helpful to point out typos? (I've only found a tiny handful!)

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Jesse Hajicek

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from: gomichan
date: Jun. 19th, 2011 09:35 pm (UTC)
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Sure, that'd be cool. Comment them on the entry for the chapter you find them in, s'il vous plait.

Edited at 2011-06-19 09:37 pm (UTC)

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Crissy

Oh god, I talk way too much.

from: steamcry
date: Jun. 23rd, 2011 03:54 am (UTC)
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Oh! Well, this is certainly an unexpected joy.

I've been, what I've termed, a constant reader ever since I was introduced to the concept of a book. This was a rather fine and dandy hobby until I grew up and realized just how expensive it was to be such. (Thanks mom for putting up with it, though I know it's partially because you didn't want to tell your kid to STOP READING.) As a poor university student, I resorted to reading online. Even as picky as I am about things, I found myself making sacrifices and resigning myself to anything of decent length.

Every now and then however, I come across a gem of a work which I hold near and dear in my memories for forever as I know it. Unfortunately, while I'm very good at remembering the work itself, I am absolute pits at titles and author names. Between several computers and a few years, this story was one of the ones lost to void of "I wish I could read whatever-it-was agains."

In any case, I'm not sure how I wound up here this time as I tend to link-surf for weeks on end, but I was certainly delighted to re-locate this very novel! (I'm also running off to buy it in the next coming weeks with my first real paycheck so it will never be lost again. :P) I might have also done a celebration dance over this archive as it's giving me a few days of things I know will be excellent.

I might also make a sacrifice to the gods in thanks for this one.

Also, in small wonderment (I honestly have no idea where I read this initially), have a few scenes been changed a bit between this version and another online? I tend to trust my memory over the words itself, but I'm still unsure. Either way, however, I'm certainly still in love with this-- sucker for dystopian lands as I am. :)

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Jesse Hajicek

Re: Oh god, I talk way too much.

from: gomichan
date: Jun. 23rd, 2011 04:39 am (UTC)
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Thanks for your kind words! As for things being different between versions... er, my latest news post explains it. Basically I'm a derp, but it's fixed now. ;p

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Crissy

Re: Oh god, I talk way too much.

from: steamcry
date: Jun. 23rd, 2011 05:13 am (UTC)
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Ah, an excuse to reread it immediately! Excellent!

I knew I needn't sleep tonight.

We all have those moments though. I know I've certainly done similar several times in the past and I look forward to doing such again in the future. I admit I'm a bit glad my brain isn't totally defunct however. If I was starting to mix up books themselves, I was going to be in trouble. :P It's the one hope I cling to when I have to charade myself out so other people can put actual names to things.

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from: anonymous
date: May. 21st, 2012 03:39 pm (UTC)
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The character development was very well done and the grittiness of the setting was compelling. A nice book to curl up with. Thank-you.

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Ann

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from: fitzwiggity
date: Jun. 11th, 2012 05:48 pm (UTC)
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I'm by no means new to your novel, I've read it before, LONG ago, back when I was in my late teens, I think. (Couldn't tell you exactly when, I've read so many things) however, the thing about you self-publishing is AWESOME because now I can own the book. :D

I recommended it to my younger sister (whose only a year younger, and I'm in my late twenties now) and we both love it very much. I'd love to be able to read the sequel.

Being a writer myself, I appreciate good books, and I hoard the awesome ones when I can. Yours is awesome, and as soon as I get my next paycheck (ahahaha!) I'll be getting your book to own. :) Probably for my birthday, cause that along with Dresden Files book #5, and the graphic novel of Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy and finally the Stephen King's Dark Tower Graphic novel set would be awesome. :D

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unloyal_olio

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from: unloyal_olio
date: Mar. 20th, 2014 09:07 pm (UTC)
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Ooooh, so I'm going to tell you all of the things that I liked!

1. Kieran's characterization was just soooo gripping. I love how wild you described in from the perspective of that nasty kid in the prologue and then we meet him from a different angle (via Ash) -- and he's not just wild but beautiful and dangerous.
2. And the way you plotted out the god-arc with Ka'an and her goddesship being buried down deep -- it kept my quite riveted.
3. You do such a wonderful job with landscapes. I could really see what was going on and there was such character to it. Do you read Ursula Le Guin? You must.
4. I was rather unsympathetic to Ash at first. He was quite the woobie when we first met him, but I loved how you gave him so much space to grow. That scene in which he threatens the shopkeeper with the gun. UNF.
5. I found "Shy" deeply amusing. On so many levels. I could tell you had fun writing him.
6. For an original free work on the internet, I loved how quickly I was sucked in. *applause* I normally have to be talked into a story and then read it past the first 60 pages until it finds it's pace.

I wouldn't say I have any deal breaker criticisms of the novel. You obviously put a great deal of love and effort into it. Like, holy cow, this was wonderful.

Something to think about though, and this is strictly my own viewpoint (but then I always like to know different readers viewpoints, so I figured I'd try and explain), but I wasn't particularly interested in Kai and Ash's love story as much after they committed to each other after the sex -- so I skimmed those parts. This is because sure, most of the tension went out of that plot line, but also, I don't really like they-found-comfort-in-each-other romantic plots. I'm much more interested in characters who allow space for each other's anger ( -- it's that whole thing where we love the people the most who allow us our hate -- so that afterwards there's total understanding, both distance and space (and more hot sex)). Kai's I'm-a-horrible-person rant didn't really fit with the rest of his characterization. I more expected him to scream at Ash and for Ash to take it and be like, "I can take even more, dumbrag." And Ash to like, "How are you real?" (and then sex to prove it.)

But like I said, this is definitely opinion, because I know some readers yearn for secure intimacy (whereas I'm married to a goddamn therapist, and I'm all like "it'd be hotter if we talked less, you know." LOL)

Anyway, like I said, I loved this. Seriously, I recced this to a whole lot of my friends. Super bravo. Thank you for this.

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jubilees_pafs

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from: jubilees_pafs
date: Mar. 26th, 2014 01:23 am (UTC)
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So hello! I just wanted to say that I actually found your book on Amazon quite awhile ago. Long enough that I've reread it about 4 times. I really really love this novel. I'm excited beyond words that you actually have a livejournal that I randomly found through tumblr via AO3. The internet is small and you're amazing. I actually should say the world is small because I actually live in Minneapolis. Please publish more books! I would buy them. Having a physically copy is much more satisfying.^_^

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mssdare

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from: mssdare
date: Apr. 3rd, 2015 09:16 pm (UTC)
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I've read this magnificent book some time ago but still can't stop thinking about it! I loved it with all my heart - the amazing setting, the myths, the slow development of affection, the characters, the MAGIC - everything was just marvelous.

I'm sure this is one of those stories one doesn't forget even years after reading.

You are such a brilliant author. I can't wait to read your other books!

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Ceares

e book?

from: ceares
date: Jul. 26th, 2015 08:27 pm (UTC)
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don't know if you're still monitoring this but came here through a rec and it definitely looks relevant to my interests but I was wondering if it's offered somewhere as an e-book somewhere other than B&N? It looks like there's only hard copies on Amazon and the other sites and I don't have a Nook.

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The novel I've waited my whole life for.

from: Sean Witter
date: Oct. 14th, 2016 02:13 am (UTC)
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As a gay soldier who grew up in a Christian home and is an incurable sci-if/fantasy fan I never even imagined I'd find such a beautifully crafted piece of literature that so perfectly appealed to everything I have ever wanted as a reader. I'm currently deployed in Africa and I downloaded The God Eaters to my phone before going out on a convoy, I read it cover to cover in three days. It made me smile, cry, broke my heart then put it all back together. It was so relatable for me, I wish you had written a thousand books of a similar genre because I would read the rest of my days away. I'm filled with elation even at the prospect of finding works like it; I never imagined that I would find such a perfect fit of a book. I want you to know that you have become a major inspiration for me in a matter of days. Thank you for sharing your Talent with the world, it's a better place for it.

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Maps?

from: Chris Johnsen
date: Jan. 17th, 2018 11:55 pm (UTC)
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I actually just read this book last summer and I couldn't possibly love it more. I do have a question tho.. is/are there a/any map(s) of this world? I ask because I want to make an RPG campaign (homebrew, nothing published or official) out of this magnificent world you've created. Please let me know.

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